I've been working on my personal statement and I've read it so many times now that I can't tell if it's good or utter rubbish…I was wondering if anyone here would be willing to take a look at it for me and give me some feedback. It's an early draft, & I'd just like someone to bounce it off of.
Beth
I’ll take a look if you like. I actually enjoy reading these things. PM it to me if you prefer that to “going public” with it. Take care!
I would strongly advise that anyone who’d like feedback on their PS take the approach Beth has taken here - ask if anyone’s willing to help. (alternatively, if there’s someone on OPM you’ve befriended, or who strikes you as particularly insightful, you could PM them and ask if they’ve got the time)
I’ve always been touched and honored when people have asked me to review their PS - you get a window into someone else’s life that is quite intimate in its way. (I have felt bad when I’ve turned people down, but right now I don’t have the distraction-free time to really let a PS settle into my brain for a good think, alas.) Anyway, don’t be shy about asking people - they are likely going to respond positively.
DO NOT post your PS onto this public site for every reason you might imagine. Wouldn’t be prudent. 
here, just use my PS. It will get you in. I promise. 
IN ORDER FOR THE ADMISSIONS STAFF TO OUR COLLEGE TO GET TO KNOW YOU, THE
APPLICANT, BETTER, WE ASK THAT YOU ANSWER THE FOLLOWING QUESTION: ARE THERE ANY SIGNIFICANT EXPERIENCES YOU HAVE HAD, OR ACCOMPLISHMENTS YOU HAVE REALIZED, THAT HAVE HELPED TO DEFINE YOU AS A PERSON?
I am a dynamic figure, often seen scaling walls and crushing ice. I have
been known to remodel train stations on my lunch breaks, making them more
efficient in the area of heat retention. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban
refugees. I write award-winning operas. I manage time efficiently.
Occasionally, I tread water for three days in a row.
I woo women with my sensuous and godlike trombone playing. I can pilot
bicycles up severe inclines with unflagging speed, and I cook Thirty-Minute
Brownies in twenty minutes. I am an expert in stucco, a veteran in love, and
an outlaw in Peru.
Using only a hoe and a large glass of water, I once single-handely defended
a small village in the Amazon Basin from a horde of ferocious army ants. I
play bluegrass cello. I was scouted by the Mets. I am the subject of
numerous documentaries. When I’m bored, I build large suspension bridges in
my yard. I enjoy urban hang gliding. On Wednesdays, after school, I repair
electrical appliances free of charge.
I am an abstract artist, a concrete analyst, and a ruthless bookie. Critics
worldwide swoon over my original line of corduroy evening wear. I don’t
perspire. I am a private citizen, yet I receive fan mail. I have been caller
number nine and have won the weekend passes. Last summer I toured New Jersey
with a traveling centrifugal-force demonstration. I bat .400.
My deft floral arrangements have earned me fame in international botany
circles. Children trust me.
I can hurl tennis rackets at small moving objects with deadly accuracy. I
once read Paradise Lost, Moby Dick, and David Copperfield in one day still
had time to refurbish an entire dining room that evening. I know the exact
location of every food item in the supermarket. I have performed several
covert operations for the CIA. I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep
in a chair. While on vacation in Canada, I successfully negotiated with a
group of terrorists who had seized a small bakery. The law of physics do not
apply to me.
I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are paid. On weekends,
to let off steam, I participate in full-contact orgami. Years ago I
discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made
extraordinary four course meals using only a moull and a toaster oven.
I breed prizewinning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving
competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin. I have played
Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis.
But I have not yet gone to medical school.
HOPE THAT WORKS!!
hi all, being new to this site and in a very ‘serious’ state of mind when i visit here as i like so many use this site for info it was incredibly funny to read your PS. it makes one wish they could send it in and have a camera hidden in the ice water pitcher just to watch the response. Thanks again for lightening up my algebra studying… 
I wanted to let you all know that I’ve started a kind of ps “exchange” message board of sorts, to go along with my website, Scrupulous Personal Statement. I thought it would be cool for us to have a place to do peer review of ps’s, or just talk about them in general. Members can set up pm’s within the site to send actual personal statements back and forth, and there is a forum set up for general questions and comments.
Do you think this is a good idea? Would you use it? Let me know…
Nanon
thanks for the offer to look at it for me Mary Bois Byrne. I really appreciate it! 
I emailed you. And futryfisician, hee.
Beth
hi Mary–I sent you a second email the other day with the PS pasted in it…not sure if it went through. If not, let me know.
thanks again!
Beth