Review of my Personal Statement

Does anyone here a councilor or have been an advising committee or application reviewing committee who has the time to review my personal statement?

I’d like to send you my PS and see if my words can get myself into the Post-Bacc Pre-Med program or do I need a more convincing statement? This is like an actual story of my life in one page leading to this pursuit that I’m pondering right now in this discussion forum. I hope anyone has a chance to give me some feedback in here.

I appreciate thoughts and help from this community (I haven’t received any feedback or comment in my previous post but I’m hoping I can get one).

Thank you.